Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of different age groups attending the cinema at least once a year in Australia over for 30 years. It is clear from the charts

this

, the proportion of attending movie house increased in each age group between 1990 and 2010. Overall, the highest rate is from 14-24-year-olds over the period shown. In 1990, around %90 of 14-24-year-olds went to the movie house at least once a year.

On the other hand

, cinema attendance was about %30 lower than

this

among people aged 25-34-year-olds and 35-49-year-olds, while the figure for aged 50+-year-olds people over %50 was the lowest level, at only %40. In 2010, the proportion of attending cinema from 25-34-year-olds fell to just over 70, before peaking in 2000 and 2006 term with 80.

As a result

, the aged 14-24-year-olds group remained the highest, at almost 100 while the 50+-year-old people were the lowest group of watching a film at least once a year.

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Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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health budget
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awareness
healthy habits
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vaccinations
screenings
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early detection
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Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

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