Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion

From the creation of our universe, human beings are always facing various kinds of troubles in their daily lives. While some agree that it is a matter of luck for many people and they should accept worst conditions, I side with those who believe that maybe we can tolerate bad
situation
but people around us will not. On the one hand, some people are of the standpoint that hard times are the best part of
life
as it teaches us many good lessons. To elaborate, when we are not facing any trouble or hardships, we simply can not learn the excitement of
life
which may hamper our personal growth process. Nelson Mandella,
for example
,
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accepted his
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phase of
life
for 25 years. He spent most of the time in jail but during that period, he gains grit and encouragement which ultimately made him the
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leader.
However
, I
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don't
agree with
this
viewpoint.
On the other hand
, I believe that some people are very strong emotionally but people around them especially family, can not tolerate
such
situations. Blood relations like father and mother are someone, who can escalate things which have bad outcomes
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if his
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young one
is not improving his
situation
.
For instance
, Asian communities in different
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countries often face troubles in finding opportunities and
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodating
accommodation
. It is an undeniable fact that they can surpass
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situation
easily but back home, their families may
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towards depression and anxiety due to
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continuous
bad thoughts.
Therefore
, one should improve his bad period of
life
, not for himself but for people around them. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
life
undoubtedly have different unwanted shades and according to some people one should accept negative aspects as a part of
life
, others,
however
, believe that people need to improve themselves and take things in
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ositive direction.
Therefore
, on balance, I agree that people need to overcome their problems and keep moving towards
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favorable
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situation
of
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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