It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at en early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this dictinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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, which put pressure on both parents and teachers to teach how children can differentiate between good and bad. I strongly agree with the statement that punishment is required to make sure their
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ight path of life. There are several types of minor and useful punishments which
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guardians and tutors can use while guiding the offsprings. For parents, they can abide
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the use of mobile phones after afternoon, which will provide time to child to have
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onversation with older family members. Indeed, communication will show the difference between right or wrong, but it
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helps in maintaining the relationships with grandparents.
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ome and no fast food for biweekly, which will be considered as punishment, to realise the mistake of the child. Overall, giving less painful yet significant punishments will leave its strong impact.
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group for one class and demand to sit with other students which will
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the students to behave
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with everybody and it helps to
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the connection with other learners. To conclude, giving punishments make a child
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ood person, by getting
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esson and correcting their mistakes for
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