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You took an elderly member of your family, who was not able to walk properly, to a museum and he/she faced a few problems. Write a letter to the manager of the museum. In your letter, * say why you visited the museum * describe the problems you faced * suggest what can be done to avoid those problems

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Dear Sir, I have recently visited your museum with my aunt who is 80 years old. The main reason for our visit was to see the new artefacts which arrived
last
 Monday.
Moreover
, my aunt has
deep
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 interest in war painting and your museum is designed for
such
. While we enjoyed every
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masterpiece
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master piece
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, my aunt had difficulties moving between different floors. The reason for
such
 is, the elevator was out of function and there wasn’t any other way.
Such
 that, she had to use stairs all the time. We all know that at the age of 80 it is not an easy task. To resolve, it is essential to at least provide
wheelchair
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a wheelchair
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 and make
ramp
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a ramp
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 for it. So,
disabled
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the disabled
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 or elderly can easily move between different floors.
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, it is best for everyone’s interest, if you can speed up elevator repair work. Thank you in advance, Yours faithfully, Jessica Pearson
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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