It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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People have various opinions regarding what truly makes a
person
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become an excellent
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or musician. While some people argued that talent is a natural gift, I personally think that guidance, dedication and hard work can contribute to the success of a
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. On the one hand, some children are born with talents and skills which are very obvious from
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early age. They are gifted and naturally master musical instruments or sports as if they had been taught for years.
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leads to the sooner success to a gifted
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compared to others in spite of undergoing the same level of training.
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, it can be deduced that some people are more
tsuccessful
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successful
than others in some specific fields.
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, I would argue that some talent can be learned by passion, dedication and training. It is obvious that a
person
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can be born with
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ood voice tone and quality but he cannot become a good singer without learning and
practicing
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.
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, many famous singers make hours of daily certain voice exercise to maintain their nice voice. Another reason is that through proper training and practice, many individuals can realise their talent. They might have some potentials but they do not explore until they are engaged in a certain field.
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uitable environment can offer a great chance for people to discover their
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strengths
. In conclusion,
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inherited genes play a key role in our success, I believe that self- development, commitments and hard work are
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required to create professionals with expertise and skills.
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