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Some people say that all mobile/cell phone conversations should be banned in public and crowded places. Others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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With the advancement of technology, almost everyone owns smartphones these days. While some feel that conversing through them in community areas should be restricted, I side with those who believe that it is impossible having taken into account emergencies and the implementation of
such
 policy. On the one hand, supporters of introducing a ban on public-made
phone
 calls might argue that they are a serious source of distraction and annoyance. Take a theater
for example
.
As a result
 of a person answering their
phone
, not only do the audience feel annoyed, but
also
 do the performers because it may take their attention away.
In addition
 to
this
, it is not uncommon to see some people using abusive language during conversations, which is inappropriate in public places,
such
 as parks. Young children might negatively be influenced
consequently
.
Therefore
, there seems to be a point in
this
 prohibition. Despite the argumentation above, I support those who think there are two main reasons why restricting
phone
 calls does not work.
Firstly
, some
phone
 calls require an urgent reaction: emergencies. Under
such
 circumstances, ignoring a call is not the right course of action because a person’s life may be saved through a single call to an ambulance,
for instance
.
Secondly
, putting
this
 suggestion into practice will not be possible unless an intelligent enough jamming machine is invented to sort out which calls, both incoming and outgoing, are urgent and immediate. I do understand that these calls are a cause of annoyance, but banning them altogether is wrong and unfeasible. In conclusion,
although
 some people argue that cell
phone
 calls should be limited in crowded places, I agree with those who believe that it is not workable as difficulties of putting it into practice are insurmountable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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