People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

Day to day life in metropolitan areas is constantly faced with various difficulties. Among these problems are limited housing and question of safety. From other people's perspective, the
government
should act and inspire city residents to live on the countryside
instead
, to which I disagree because the focus should be how the
government
could set a sustainable community so people can be encouraged to move to provinces. A big challenge in capital cities is housing. There is
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igh percentage of dwellers who flock the cities but living space is very limited. For
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high demand for a limited supply resulted in exorbitant rent making it impossible for
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to afford
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shelter. Many settled illegally or succumbed into renting
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housing facilities or worst, become homeless. A good example of
this
is in Hong Kong wherein one boxlike room accommodates all activities of daily living in exchange
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to the roof fee. Another problem to face is safety. As there is overpopulation there is
also
countless unemployment happening busy metropolis. Those who are left jobless may go to extreme measures and do
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ct of crime
such
as robbery that possibly will result in a more violent act
such
as homicide.
For instance
, Paris has more theft rates than in the province area. In my view, asking people to move to rural areas will not be the best solution to be implemented by the
government
. The main reason people dwell in the city is to provide monetary support for their families. The
government
should
then
boost the regional towns' local services, products or tourism in order to generate
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more people will be willing to be placed in these areas thereby avoiding the congestion in the cities. In conclusion, the main obstacles
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comfortable everyday living in large districts are housing and safety. It is highly suggested that the
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urban life.
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