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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#computers #education
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 trend in the utilization of computers in education. The advantage of using
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omputer in school is the convenience it aids to students.
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reat amount that pupils tend to be lazy in learning. Computers are a huge help for simplifying most school task. It is
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easy access to information through the World Wide Web and is within a click away. Students save
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arge amount of
time
 in finding data about a subject in a matter of minutes than scavenging in a vast library that could take several hours or a day to search all the information they need. School activities
such
 as writing, presentation, calculation are simply effortless through the use of various
computer
 applications
such
 as Word, PowerPoint and Excel.
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omputer in education is at
time
 unreliable. The varied information one can gather
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 the internet is questionable as there are
also
 fraudulent writings published as anyone can easily
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 anything. Students may find it convenient to search but there is a high chance of cheating as it can be copied straightforwardly.
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data stored or the student work for hours may be lost if the
computer
 crash or become broken beyond fixing. In conclusion, the usage of
computer
 for education can be convenient but can be unreliable at the same
time
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