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Families are not as close as they used to be before. What do you think are the causes of this. What can be done to make family close?

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 ago, families used to be a part and parcel of lives whereas in
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uclear family is preferred by masses. Definitely, it is true that family bonds are not
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strong as much as they used to be in past. There are
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lethora of reasons behind it. According to my notion,
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ain issue is
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usy
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ossible solutions will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs. To embark,
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irst and foremost reason
of
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 families apartness is that
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hole society has become a workaholic
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this
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time
. As, to
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 basic needs of
life
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 the happiest lifestyle, day and nights jobs duties are being performed by human beings. To add on
this
, to keep social beings far from each other a crucial role is being played by technology
however
 it has become a fundamental part of today's
life
 but most of the leisure
time
 is spent on using
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nternet
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for instance
 social media
instead
 of spending precious moments with
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 one's. As
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 someone has been rightly said that every problem has
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olution.In
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ame way, to lessen the family gap, at least,
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time
 should be saved for meeting with close one's
such
 as plan a dinner on weekends with friends and relatives or arranging a small family trip once in a week. Apart from
this
,
instead
 of using social networking that moments should be spent with families
for example
 watching movies with children and play games with families at home. To recapitulate,
although
 money is paramount to spent
life
 and make
life
 easier, but family
cannt
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can't
 be replaced by anything else in
this
 materialistic world. According to my perspective,
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doing other chores of
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aily routine is
also
 necessary meanwhile family is equally important and
life
 can be made more fascinating and happier by spending
time
 with family
instead
 of wasting
time
 on technology.
Submitted by Sukhdeep  on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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