Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

Travelling overseas has become a natural way for a huge number of teenagers who concludes their high school years but prefer a sabbatical
year
instead
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enrolling in the university. Most commonly for European citizens, take
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year
visiting different cultures around the world, taking their
first
job experiences, or even making an amount of money
to begin
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graduation, have
being
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the
first
choice for people on their 18 or 19 years-old. Indeed, refusing
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go straight to university has great benefits. Young adults around the world
struggles
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for their
first
job, mainly because some companies are not big fans of hiring employees who
suffers
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with
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a lack of experience,
therefore
taking
an
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year
in different places could solve the job experience issue, once most
part
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of people who choose
this
way are proficient in English, making easier to find a position in destinations as Asia and America. Currently, networking is a key point on being or not successful in a professional career,
then
preferring kick off it when young and in locations far away of their hometowns would be remarkable in the future, even more in case of applying for positions in international companies with branch worldwide.
On the other hand
, there is a movement in some corporations for recruiting the
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candidates, creating an enormous problem on graduating later, even with a great reason for that,
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postponing to receive an academic certificate could affect all the professional life. Frankly,
besides
being great to take
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time travelling and living difference experiences, it is not affordable for most families, being
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precocious graduation, the only way to achieve success. To summarize, there is a vast array of justifies being in
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or against a sabbatical
year
,
however
living different cultures would be always my choice. Clearly,
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amily’s
financial
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financials
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must be considered, but in case of being affordable, parents should support their children on living the most different experiences.
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