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Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, discussing
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nvironment and its conservation has become more popular than years ago, specifically on social
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, a vast percentage of
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lobal population does not seem concerned and engaged
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 the topic, mainly in
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 countries located in Asia, Africa and Latin America. The most actual researches have exposed how human-being activities
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 the planet. Deforestation increases Earth’s temperature in a short time-space which impacts wildlife and
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 primary industrial activities, as fishing. In the
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 years, parties focused on environment protection has achieved relevance, making their voice and topics being heard,
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a limited portion of
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opulation understand how relevant it is. Some of those who do not care about preservation have
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conomic gain on predatory practices and are responsible to spread fake news on social
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 making NGO’s protests sound like political demonstrations and false. When the discussion is focused
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 specific remote locations, we should be more comprehensive to judge some activities. Using northern-Brazilian communities as
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xample, it is clear how there is a lack of information, once most people are illiterate and have
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 been to a school, even a kindergarten.
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ogging industry and predatory fishing is the way used to make money and the only income for families. Talking about avoiding deforestation and fishing nets would sound absurd. Frankly, once environmental protection discussion gains power in political and TV, most of the people will begin to think about the topic. It is up to local governments
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pply restrictive laws focused on preservation, and make the issue be discussed since childhood.
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 being discussed, studies unveiling how human-being has impacted the planet should be more disseminated, mainly to people who are not able to get in universities, than almost a totality of the population would be exposed to information and
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 to eventual punishments, making the planet’s future better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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