I many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different part of their country after their retirement. Discuss why it is so and the outcome of the situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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owadays globalized world, it is common for people to move away from their original homes and countries,
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retire
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from work.
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allows living new experiences and
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new places. The main reason
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phenomena is the need for a change in peoples way of living. When one is at the end of their career path, a need to gain new experiences, visit new places and enhance
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uality of living is felt.
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, many employees
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considerable bonuses after retirement and permanent payments from securing agencies that allows them to buy a
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house or travel
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