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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Since the olden days,
music
 has become a famous activity which most of the people like spending their time with it. In fact, even some academics believe that each younger ought to be learned on playing musical
equipments
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.In my point of view, I agree with
this
 statement as it would improve younger's
creativity
 of
mind
 and bring healthiness towards their mental health.
To begin
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creativity
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mind
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, which should
be develop
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 since in
the
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childhood.
In particular
, as children would be easier to be bored in one direct learning,
music
 is the best way to attract them in focusing their learning. Many studies
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showed
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 that being
being
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studying
music
improve
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 the
creativity
 of people's
mind
 because it triggers the right and left side of
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rain which working together in
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time.
As a result
,
by
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implementing musical items to be played in school would lead to the empowerment of
y
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ounger's
mind
.
In addition
, playing
music
 instrumental by the teenager would bring
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 in their mental
healthness
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healthiness
healthy ness
. In the contemporary world, it has become a trait, which children have to work out on many subjects in their study. Clearly, it could contribute to the depression among
this
 younger population because
this
 modern study
sytem
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system
 has put up
p
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ressure in their early stage of life. Despite
this
 stressful life,
music
 should be learned to them for relaxing purpose and lessening their burden on
s
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tudy.
Thus
, implementing
music
 in children's studying become a need, which could bring cheer over their faces, and bring positivity for their mental condition. In conclusion, suggesting
on
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teaching musical instrument toward children would affect them on their
creativity
 of
mind
 and healthier mental status, which people should aware
about
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 it in order for beneficial of
y
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ounger generation.
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