You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Since the olden days,

music

has become a famous activity which most of the people like spending their time with it. In fact, even some academics believe that each younger ought to be learned on playing musical

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.In my point of view, I agree with

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statement as it would improve younger's

creativity

of

mind

and bring healthiness towards their mental health.

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, which should

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since in

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childhood.

In particular

, as children would be easier to be bored in one direct learning,

music

is the best way to attract them in focusing their learning. Many studies

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showed

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that being

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studying

music

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the

creativity

of people's

mind

because it triggers the right and left side of

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rain which working together in

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time.

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implementing musical items to be played in school would lead to the empowerment of

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ounger's

mind

.

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, playing

music

instrumental by the teenager would bring

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in their mental

healthness

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healthiness

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. In the contemporary world, it has become a trait, which children have to work out on many subjects in their study. Clearly, it could contribute to the depression among

this

younger population because

this

modern study

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system

has put up

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ressure in their early stage of life. Despite

this

stressful life,

music

should be learned to them for relaxing purpose and lessening their burden on

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tudy.

Thus

, implementing

music

in children's studying become a need, which could bring cheer over their faces, and bring positivity for their mental condition. In conclusion, suggesting

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teaching musical instrument toward children would affect them on their

creativity

of

mind

and healthier mental status, which people should aware

about

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it in order for beneficial of

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ounger generation.