Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.
There are different opinions about whether 3 generations of one family should live together or live independently in terms of cohesion and traditions, but there is no doubt that the main there is no doubt that the main
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responsibility and comfort.
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,
reason
for living together is emotional support to
each other. Verify preposition usage
for
For example
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lives
life
life's
lifes
, while with children they can participate in their life and get happier and less depressed. Correct your spelling
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true that children who lives
with their grandparents are more in touch with relativesChange the verb form
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because elderly people not only talk about roots of their family and Remove the comma
apply
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invite guests to create a great connection between new and older generation.
By contrast
, different age groups has
its own needs, resulting in different lifestyles. Change the verb form
have
For instance
, if elderly people usually avoid a
noisy places, children prefer to play and do a lot of loud activities. Correct the article-noun agreement
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a
reason
to live separately is the lack of time to grandparents. Because their children are at work and busy, it is more appropriate to
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to
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lives
life
lifes
.
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most cases it is better to grandparents live independently, because they will live Verify preposition usage
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their
Correct your spelling
lives
life
lifes
without fear of isolation and children often visit them.Correct your spelling
lives
also
responsibility and comfort.
On the one handAdd a comma
,
reason
for living together is emotional support for each other. For example
, grandparents are less likely to manage their daily lives, while with children they can participate in their life and get happier and less depressed. It is also
true that children who live with their grandparents are more in touch with relatives,
because elderly people not only talk about roots of their family and Remove the comma
apply
also
invite guests to create a great connection between new and older generation.
By contrast
, different age groups have its
own needs, resulting in different lifestyles. Change the pronoun
their
For instance
, if elderly people usually avoid noisy places, children prefer to play and do a lot of loud activities. Also
i
mportant Add an article
an
reason
to live separately is the lack of time to grandparents. Because their children are at work and busy, it is more appropriate for old people to live their own lives.
In conclusion, in most cases it is better to grandparents live independently, because they will live their lives without fear of isolation and children often visit them.Submitted by kartoseckam on
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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