Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

There are different opinions about whether 3 generations of one family should live together or live independently in terms of cohesion and traditions, but
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responsibility and comfort. On the one hand
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there is no doubt that the main
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for living together is emotional support
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each other.
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, grandparents are less likely to manage their daily
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, while with children they can participate in their life and get happier and less depressed.
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with their grandparents are more in touch with relatives
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because elderly people not only talk about roots of their family and
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invite guests to create a great connection between new and older generation.
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, different age groups
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its own needs, resulting in different lifestyles.
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noisy places, children prefer to play and do a lot of loud activities.
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to live separately is the lack of time to grandparents. Because their children are at work and busy, it is more appropriate
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old people
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ive their own
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most cases it is better to grandparents live independently, because they will live
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without fear of isolation and children often visit them.
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responsibility and comfort. On the one hand
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there is no doubt that the main
reason
for living together is emotional support for each other.
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, grandparents are less likely to manage their daily lives, while with children they can participate in their life and get happier and less depressed. It is
also
true that children who live with their grandparents are more in touch with relatives
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because elderly people not only talk about roots of their family and
also
invite guests to create a great connection between new and older generation.
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, different age groups have
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own needs, resulting in different lifestyles.
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, if elderly people usually avoid noisy places, children prefer to play and do a lot of loud activities.
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to live separately is the lack of time to grandparents. Because their children are at work and busy, it is more appropriate for old people to live their own lives. In conclusion, in most cases it is better to grandparents live independently, because they will live their lives without fear of isolation and children often visit them.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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