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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. how do you think this had changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

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Nowadays, it is hard to
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 without the help of technological appliances. Those gadgets bring lots of advantages to us that improving our working efficiency.
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, with the convenience of technology, there are some drawbacks in terms of over depending on it. The up-to-date appliances have totally transformed a company’s working style and brought many benefits.
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, computers have more functions and cutting-edge equipment. Employees can enhance their working speed.
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, it is more convenient to contact with customers and colleagues by email, message, or skype. Those are dramatically decreasing the waiting
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 between them.
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, there is no distance through the video call. It is easy to hold a video conference without the limit of border and
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. Global organizations or companies are received positive impacts from it.
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, some adverse effects developing with the technology
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. There is no private
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. Sometimes, workers still receive messages from their customers or managers when they are off
work
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 or on holiday. It will increase the stress for them and form a culture of working overtime.
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, it is harder to focus on their
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 result from different kinds of notice including messages, emails, or even social media.
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 will reduce the efficiency and quality of
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. At the same
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, people will lose the negotiation skill and social ability. Those cause negative effects on the companies and employees.
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