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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Opinions diverge greatly on who should take
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 of the people when they turn old. It is often argued that governments should pay for old people
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, in my view, it is the responsibility of family members to take
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elderly people. On the one hand, it is reasonable to argue that youngsters are accountable for elders
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 in their family.
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, parents take the duty of bringing up their children.
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, They pay for education, entertainment, and healthcare of their children until they reach teenage.
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, a typical Indian family spends around 40-50 lakhs for raising their children, and once the parents become old, kids remain responsible for their
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, it is judicious for a family to pay for their
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overnment.
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, governments can extend their grants only to few aged people, who are either homeless or abandon by their family. By doing so, the funds can be wisely spent on other welfare programs.
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, in Singapore, not all the aged people will receive
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 support from the government, only a limited number of applications receive grants every year based on their neediness. In conclusion, it appears to me that a family should pay for the healthcare of their elderly people, while
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overnment can intervene when they are abandoned by their family members.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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