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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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There is no doubt that the business market has a large incidence of local-scale companies
besides
 the multinational ones. Despite the immense benefits of
this
 competition, many small businesses are about to be disappeared totally and converted to little cosmopolitan companies. The
first
 point to consider is why disassociation of small workplace can be of quiet drawbacks. The reason for
this
 is that the local economy will lose indispensable productivity and passion can not be found in large-scale projects.
For example
, most local brands invest in the quality of the materials to build their clients' loyalty, despite building a fortune.
In contrast
, if there are no indigenous markets, many products may waste their traditional sense and privileges. The opposite point to be taken into account is how most multinational-based projects can appeal most of the clients either to work for or even purchase their services.
This
 is because most customers prefer to avoid the hassle of trying a new, local service without any others' expectations.
For instance
, it is reported that most of
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ocal dwellers of the city resort to doing shopping in well-known, sheer markets rather than the near, local ones.
Additionally
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people always consider the value for money by fork out more for fewer products as long as they are multinational brands.
On the contrary
, If there is no multinational organizations within the country, myriad of clients will direct their attention outside the local economy at all to reap their required needs from more confidential work companies. To recap, despite a lot of drawbacks were reported on disappearing small companies,
this
also
 may meet the needs of many clients who prefer the cosmopolitan associations to serve them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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