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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Since the earliest times, many countries have been working for
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the development
. Some of them reached
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their aim and carry the flag with honour.
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the others still have been working. There is no doubt that the developments are not happening without any support. For that reason
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many countries are trying to get helped by some international organizations due to financial concerns. Personally, I believe that
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 the international organizations are very
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 and useful to be
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. Because they have brilliant
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 genious workers in their own from all over the world. So I believe that it is possible to compare
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every
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 to give
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light the developing
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countries
.
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, generally speaking
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the people who are working in
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international organizations are like
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ambassador
 because they know what they are doing. In conclusion, due to
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odern and digital world
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, international organizations have a big important role. I strongly support their works.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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