As well as making money, businesses should have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Concerning the issue of

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of enterprises on society, people hold different views. An army of people reckons that

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earning money, commercial organizations should

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attention to everything around them. From my perspective, I strongly agree with

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statement for many convincing reasons. On the one hand, it is undeniable that the appearance of many different companies each year has helped a lot in

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the national budget. Namely, with the domination of large groups like Apple or

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Microsoft

, they often employ thousands of

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around the world

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every single year with plenty of good remunerations. These are

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helpful for reducing

jobless

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proportion,

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increasing profit, it

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proved that enterprises usually take

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and

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of and

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have responsibilities with

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. Another good example is there are more and more private

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are

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on medical service, their debut not only help doctors

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get more modern

equipments

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to cure the patient but

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reduce jostle in the hospital.

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, it can be

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seen that the came out of these

businesses

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plays an important part in our life.

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, enterprises have to make specific environmental protection and

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a fresh air workplace for their employees. If they want to have a long time commercial campaigns and create

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good images for their groups, the

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have to

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about solutions for the future as

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materials which are environmentally friendly.

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,

businesses

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charity programs to help

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poor people,

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and so on by taking a small portion of their annual profits. In summary, for the reasons mentioned above, it can be affirmed that

businesses

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to

responsible

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with communication if they can and afford it.