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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

#people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills
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onsiderable amount of people who believe that
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 teaching how to be a good
parent
 to every young person as part of their education helps them to
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understand
 the importance of it at a young age which can lead to
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 a good
parent
 for their
child
. Understanding the parenthood is as
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important
 as
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ood upbringing of any
child
. To raise a
child
 with essential care and love one every
parent
 should have
adiquate
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adequate
 knowledge about all the basic things regarding
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nurturing
 a
child
.
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, understanding the needs of
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ealthy diet, sleeping habits, language learning,
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 problems etc. Parenting is a great responsibility for which necessary
knowlage
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knowledge
 is essential.
This
 can be a great help for family planning as well. Majority of
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opulation around the globe produces children without having enough
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knowledge
 about it. Having
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ack of knowledge about parenting can lead to serious impact in Childs life.
For example
, In
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ase of health emergency
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the
child
 can suffer major physical problems
such
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 being handicapped for life or in some cases death. To conclude , learning how to be
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ood
parent
 at
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oung age can be
extreamly
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extremely
 helpful in raising a
child
 with great health and right habits.
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