Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility for sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people hold the belief that governments should be responsible

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controlling the

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rate due to the unhealthy impact of

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over-consuming, while others think that doing

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. While I think

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overnment should take the

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, I still

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that individuals should take the main part in

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intake

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controlling. I understand why some people hold the view that controlling

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intake

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is the

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of governments. Chief among

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is that governments have

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bility

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companies whose products containing

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, in some developed countries, governments enforce the laws of how much

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can be contained in a product. The

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governments have a strong impact on encouraging citizens not to eat much

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.

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means that governments can improve the citizens' awareness of eating less

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education and propaganda.

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would argue that each person has their own

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controlling their

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intake

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. Individuals need to know about their health status. In fact,

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ifferent person can consume

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ifferent quantity of

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. By way of illustration, some people should not eat much

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because of diabetes suffering. In other cases, some people need to eat high

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rate food to boost their energy to do work. If people do not take

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or awareness of their health status and

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intake

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, they can suffer from several health problems. In conclusion, while I agree the governments should take part in controlling the

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rate, I am of the opinion that

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intake

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should be controlled by individuals.