Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many parents believe that taking
care
of children is better left in the hands of
child
care
services than in the trust of their own relatives.
This
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child
care
centers
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, children can enhance both brain development and interpersonal skills but in my opinion, for health reason, it is better to leave the children in the
care
of family members. I will discuss the reasons for
this
in detail in the following essay. Leaving children at
day
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care
centers
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can be of benefit for a
child
's intellectual and interpersonal development.
This
is due to the fact that most
care
providers
are usually have
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set of knowledge and skills about children's progression that they have studied beforehand. They can facilitate activities and play that are stimulating for children's brain in order for them to think smart.
Additionaly
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, these fun activities, which often in the form of play, are shared with other kids, which in turn can teach them ways how to deal with other people that are essential in improving their interaction skills.
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, according to studies, those children that were exposed to early school set-up with their age group were reported to have higher IQ that
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them in best universities, and a higher EQ that
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them to establish
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elationship with ease in their adult years.
On the contrary
,
contarction
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contraction
of common diseases will be greatly avoided if children
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at home with a family member. The children will not be in contact with other children who might have communicable diseases that could give them harm effects.
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, places are closed due to
corona virus
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pandemic because there is a greater chance of contracting it in a space where there will be close contacts
such
as
care
facilities for children. Health should be of priority because a failing body is of no use for increasing IQ or EQ. In conclusion, in my perspective, developing knowledge and skills can be the key benefits of placing children in
child
care
institutions.
Nonetheless
, it is best if a member of the family will look out for them in order for them to be away from a place where there is a high risk of contracting health problems.
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