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Life was simpler without technology. How far you agree..

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Scientists have faith that technology will shape the future in a perfect manner which is so helpful to the upcoming generations. But technology
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 own advantages and disadvantages respectively. From 20th century, scientists is that time has discovered many useful technologies which made people happy at that time like computer, internet, mail
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 so that people who are far away with their family members can have a communication with no interference which was one of the best
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 that ever happened. In
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1st century many social media apps were started with high expectations where they thought that people in the modern world will use it properly like conducting some social awareness activities and
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 will help the people in need. But some companies making these social media as a business and making sure that children getting addicted and manipulated easily. Even the politicians are taking
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dvantage and misleading the people. I disagree that
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life is simpler with so much
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technology.
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