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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice?

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These days, buying ready-made
food
 rather than cooking at home is becoming more
favorable
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 by many individuals. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some reasons behind
this
 phenomenon as well as the benefits and drawbacks involved. On the one hand, there are some reasons why ready-made
food
 is
an
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 preferable choice for many people nowadays. The
first
 one is that some of them might be so busy with their work that they prefer buying ready-made
food
, which does not require as much
time
 and effort as preparing
food
 at home. Another reason is that some people lack cooking skills, even at a basic level to cook a simple meal. They, when being a child, were not encouraged to learn and practice cooking at home by their parents or attend cooking classes at school and spend more
time
 studying academic subjects
instead
.
As a result
, they are unable to cook and might have no choice but buy processed
food
 for their own.
On the other hand
, the availability of already made
food
 can have both positive and negative effects. One certain benefit is that a lot of
time
 for cooking, buying
food stuff
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 and cleaning can be saved.
This
 might be extremely helpful and be of importance for busy people who can make use of
time
 to do other important things rather than cooking.
However
, the main problem with ready-made
food
 in my country is that their quality is often questioned. It is difficult to determine whether the industry follows the standard of
food
 hygiene because of the lack of official regulation.
Therefore
, many people eating these types of
food
 quite often are facing health problems. In conclusion, ready-made
food
 can be a good option
to
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 everyone, especially for busy individuals and those who lack cooking abilities.
This
 is convenient for us in today's hectic life, but
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uality of those types of
food
 is one aspect that needs to be taken
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 consideration for
such
 an option.
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