You are going to have a family party in a party in a private room of a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager and say - Why do you need to use this private room - What do you need them to provide for the party - Inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

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Dear Sir, Hope

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letter finds you in radiant health and

best

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of spirits. My name is Rushi Patel and I'm writing to let you know that, I'm planning to celebrate my sister's birthday party in your hotel. Let me explain my situation, my sister is going

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abroad just after her birthday party. Due to

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reason, I wanna book one big private room in your hotel. So

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and my other relatives can enjoy party

picefully

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peacefully

over

ther

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there

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need

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awasome

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decoration in the room and some speakers as well. So we can enjoy music properly. I will

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prefer some

softdrinks

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soft drinks

over there. Would you kindly, provide me

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best price for the food, because I'm planning to order a huge

quentity

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quantity

of food. My contact number is 9099993467. In case you wanna contact me directly and

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let me know your

avalibility

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availability

, so I can come to

finilize

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finalize

everything with you. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, RUSHI

Submitted by rushipatel1953 on Fri Oct 23 2020

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

165 words

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