The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Private data is collected by leading
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person’s. In my opinion,
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isadvantages far exceed than the advantages.
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private data arrange
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help to stop money laundering Admittedly , there some basic benefits. It is good to collect data which data analyze police point out the terrorist and their movement .
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S military was able to find Osama bin
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a buddle of drawbacks . Collecting data without permission is a cyber-crime. As usually most of the people share their personal information or private picture to
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elievable person or special someone which is not public whenever it is seen by
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authorities.
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Bollywood
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starts drug information leak up
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for
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companies .Online shopping is ubiquitous nowadays.
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online payment is secure ,
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provider at look over
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which is increased the chances of hacking .The most awful issue is some time
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takes personal information of
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members by the help of them
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can stop the protest
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has no right to block
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someone's
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It is hard to point out ,from my view , the obstacles are more than the beneficial views.
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