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Nowadays, more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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We spend a huge portion of our
time
 on the Internet. We check social media, emails and text messages. It's undeniable that a lot of our daily tasks can be done remotely. Nowadays, more and more companies are letting their employees work from home, which is a great possibility for the majority. Since 2000, Internet reliability and speed has increased significantly but the question we should ask ourselves is whether or not business meetings and
trainings
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 should take place online? The main advantage of
this
 solution is that people can attend these no matter where they are.
This
 allows employers to hire the best specialists from all around the world, which could be beneficial for multiple corporations. Remote jobs are
also
 said to be most people's dream. For the majority of my friends, it would be a dream come true to work and travel around the world at the same
time
.
On the other hand
, online meetings rely fully on the Internet
connection
, which can be damaged from
time
 to
time
. It's crucial for every attendee to have
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ast and reliable network
connection
 because in the worst-case scenario they end up not hearing any word from the meeting. If the Internet
connection
 was reliable enough,
this
 solution would be a go for most companies. For now, companies mostly stick to in-person meetings. Even though Internet
connection
 may not be completely reliable, all of the advantages I discussed above outweigh disadvantages and business meetings and
trainings
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 should place online despite all the minuses.
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