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The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Today we are living in the gender equality world. Duties and responsibilities for Children are equally divided. Traditionally it was
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 very well as compared to men. Females do have
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 outside fieldwork was done by men and she takes care of home and children due to that they have proficiency in it. Thomas Alva Edison's mother was one of the great examples of it how she turns her child's entire life with great childcare. As time changes Women started working outside field jobs and the picture got completely changed. She is now counted as equal contributor like a male. A
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 gave her confidence and economic stability.
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. A man can much more contribute at childcare though women are great in that area. Famous cricket player
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Yuvraj Singh's father is one of the best role models for
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 they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. Male and female have their own abilities we can't really compare them but one thing is very sure and
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