IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

In many countries schools have severe problems with students behaviour. What do you think are the causes for this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #schools #students #behaviour
Across the Globe, Schools are facing lots of problems with the students enrolled.Students are creating harsh environments for teachers.In the passage below, I will put some light on the burning problems caused by students in high school and various ways to eradicate them. Teenagers are not fully matured to judge between right and wrong.During adolescent human mind explores the environment and exploits its nature.It tends to do things which give it more rewards.Sometimes children like to break things and finds it funny.It is their novice Biological brain, which is giving them adrenaline rush when they create trouble for others.Teenagers often tend to create havoc in a class by throwing papers, playing while the teacher is teaching etc. All these actions are acts of joy to teenagers.They don't have enough sense to predict the value of doing a task. While teenagers are not fully aware of what is positive or negative, there are several ways to limit
this
behaviour
 of them.It is very crucial, to take action and penalize them.The
first
 responsibility lies for the parents to keep a watch on their children
behaviour
, making sure they don't join bad company.Spending time with kids and teaching them value things, helps a lot in the development of a young mind.Separate classes on ethical
behaviour
 by high school
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 can help a number of students together at the same time.While these are ways to overcome
this
 hurdle, if nothing works
then
 management is liable to take strict actions against violators. Though numerous books are published on children's
behaviour
 and how to train them to be socially excepted, one major point these books miss is how to convince and influence them.Strict methods have worked for long to change the
behaviour
 of an individual, which sadly is still practised today by a large number of population.Its high time to start behavioural training from playschools itself.
Submitted by karandeepdps on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: