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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punsihment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is significant nowadays for children to learn about right or wrong, as they are the future of
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hild. Guardian can ground children from their favourite activities for several days, which is a kind of punishment and ultimately teenagers will learn how to behave good and avoid to do
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ame mistake. To illustrate, in foreign countries, parents use the non- violent methods of punishments, to teach and develop a sense of understanding among the kids.
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, sometimes punishments can have adverse effects too, as
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umber of punishments, children can become stubborn and frustrated.
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emedy that let the kid alone deal with the problem and understand the situation. Indeed, there will be a good relationship between parent and child and kid will learn from his mistakes. To conclude, every problem does not end with the punishment, parents should try to explain things to kids before giving them the punishments, which will build
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onfidence of children to deal with situations and ask for the help of parents.

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