Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

Nowadays, more and more students plan to
study
in foreign countries even when they are in primary school. There are much more parents urgently want to send their children to
study
overseas.
This
tide has various influences on both children and society. I will state my views below. For students who
study
overseas, there are some benefits
such
as broadening their horizons. Studying abroad gives more opportunities to interact with other cultures and accept
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differences, which contribute to
develope
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develop
developing
their different ways of thinking. Another crucial effect is that they can improve their ability
of thinking
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independently. Due to far away from their parents, they have to face
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problems and find out solutions by themselves.
However
, there are some negative effects
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them. When they come back, they will feel they are not familiar with domestic career styles and relationship circles. It is difficult to integrate into
collegues
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colleagues
who
study
in hometown for that their deep western insights can't persuade the
collegues
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colleagues
or be accepted by them. As for governments or countries, more students studying abroad not only brings about new technology and innovation insights
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but
also
intrigues or pushes the
reform
of Chinese education patterns. We are on the way to become a giant technological country, the innovation ability got by the strongest strength of the society - the younger generation
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is the most efficient way to achieve the goal. If we want to improve our self-innovation ability, our country should pay attention to education
reform
, with which scramming teaching way can be changed. Students who come back from other countries are the most
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spirits to make some contribution
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education
reform
.
However
, there are too many students who prone to other cultures plan to
study
abroad very early and are willing to migrate to other countries.
This
can result in
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oss of talents, who misunderstand or undervalue local cultures. To sum up,
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ncreasing number of students studying abroad can improve their horizons, and contribute to the innovation and
reform
of countries. Whereas, it
also
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about some strangeness of career path for students, as well as
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oss of talents and culture undervalues for countries.
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