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Today more people travelling than ever before. Why is this so? What are the benefits of travelling to the traveller?

#people #traveller
In today's world, more people are travelling than before. We can explain a lot of reason
about
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 it. We can discuss what it brings to people that are more travelling than the others.
First
 of all, to have more and cheaper opportunities makes easy travelling. When we go out of our hometown we can different choices to stay in.
For example
, hotels that have different stars or hostels that are
more
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cheaper
also
 we may
travel
 by distinct vehicles.
For instance
 by plane, bus, train, car etc.
On the other hand
, increasing social relationship by using social media influences people to
travel
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other places without their hometown. Especially the bloggers and their sharing materials motivate to visit new lands that people haven't seen before.
Hence
, nowadays people much
more brave
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 to go to other cities or countries. But as you know Covid-19 pandemic make
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ifficult to
travel
 to other places.
Although
 they want to go to other countries as
touristies
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tourists
touristy
, because of pandemic
goverment
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government
 of their doesn't allow them.
As a result
,
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peoples can easily reach more opportunities in order to
travel
. At the same time visiting the other places improve socially and culturally them. I believe that we can
travel
 where we want very soon, though today Covid-19 makes some trouble.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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