In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

Majorly in the building nations,
workers
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are seen transforming their lives from rural to urban
areas
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. There lie enormous factors which lead to
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behaviour. In
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further
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passage, I will discuss possible reasons and problems caused
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. Talking about the potential reasons
first,
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workers
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move to a new location in search of a better job. Urban
areas
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have more opportunities
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workers
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get attracted.
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, a gate-keeper earns Rs 110 in rural India
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is way lower than wages given in the Urban
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.In urban
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, work is available
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all seasons, compared to seasonal work like crop sowing and
harping
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harvesting
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in the rural
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.If the entire family is dependent on a single worker, these
workers
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cant
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can't
live with low wages.All these factors together lead to a huge shift in the population. Though these are valid reasons for the shift,
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leads to a ruck load of problems.
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,
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the Urban
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Population feels insecure
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the movement. They feel jealous if someone from a rural area
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the job opportunity,
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they both applied
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, a large number of small vendors
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move
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from
job deficient
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job-deficient
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cities
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to other
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, which creates instability
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increased population.
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, when a large number of
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moved from Nepal to Delhi, it created a havoc situation in the capital.
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, it causes lots of problems in urban
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.
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, there
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many pros and cons to
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movement.
Workers
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have one perspective,
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city residents have the other.
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the only solution is the development of the rural
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.

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task
Make your plan clear. Start with a short plan. Show why people move and the problems. End with a simple conclusion that states your main idea.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use clear start lines like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Finally' to show order.
lexis
Be careful with word choice. Some words are not right for this topic. Use easy, simple words. Do not use long or hard words.
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling mistakes. Check 'harping' (should be 'harvesting'), 'ruck load' (use 'many problems'), 'havoc' (trouble).
content
The essay shows both reasons and problems, so task is in view.
structure
There are links in ideas and some real examples.
presentation
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • move
  • move to
  • rural
  • city
  • urban
  • job
  • jobs
  • work
  • pay
  • money
  • education
  • school
  • training
  • skill
  • health
  • health care
  • hospital
  • transport
  • road
  • train
  • bus
  • housing
  • home
  • rent
  • crowding
  • overcrowding
  • traffic
  • pollution
  • noise
  • stress
  • unemployment
  • unemployed
  • farming
  • farm
  • harvest
  • drought
  • weather
  • climate
  • service
  • services
  • government
  • policy
  • plan
  • development
  • industry
  • factory
  • brain drain
  • youth
  • young
  • family
  • relatives
  • remittance
  • send money
  • village
  • country side
  • city life
  • city centre
  • rural area
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