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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Most of the persons working long hours have the least time for
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ree time enjoying. I think
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medical science proved that pressuring on
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erson a very few makes his life dull and gloomy. He feels very irritated himself when he does his duty
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 the weekend or holiday.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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