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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters? do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #relief #disasters
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Natural disasters are always caused
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a plethora of life and property damage. Cyclones, earthquakes, tsunami causes havoc and makes those countries suffer from an economic crisis as well. Poor countries suffer more by natural disasters than the developed countries. It's so hard for those countries to make the situation back to normal. Some people opine that rich countries should
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 poor countries with humanitarian relief during these natural disasters. I completely agree with them and I will explain why in
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, natural disasters are unpredictable and cause a lot of devastation. Wealthy countries like the USA with
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 of the United Nations the should take an initiative to
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 backward countries when they are attacked by
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natural disasters.
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sunami in 2003 killed millions of people and caused billions of
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 property loss. All nations supported the countries hit by it. Those counties are recovered fastly with
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 of those wealthy nations, and UNO.
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how we should stand for everyone in the need. If humans in any country are suffering, all countries should respond and must help them. In fact,
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 is not only a rich country's responsibility but
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 as a human
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it's everyone's duty. Financially some countries are strong and they can release relief funds and give military
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 to rescue the people stuck in the disasters.
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 not only makes countries bonds stronger but
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 works as a shining example for our future generations.
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 positive message will give strength to the poor countries to face natural disasters. To conclude, as a human it is everyone's responsibility to
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 others when they need it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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