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Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too importat or valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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wheather
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whether
 to share a data or not solely depends on the owner of that data. Many people consider that it is helpful to give out adequate or detailed
information
 in scientific surveys, business and scholastic world.
However
, there is an equally voiced another perspective which claims that some records are too vital or relevant to be given at a zero cost. In my opinion, sharing
information
 can eradicate ignorance and sharing it freely can devalue it and make people lazy. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments
further
 and put forward my opinion as well before drawing a conclusion. On one hand, giving out much knowledge on a topic can help do away with ignorance. If people have access to detailed resources, they will understand the content very and it will assist them to know much about what they previously knew nothing about.
For example
, a dissertation providing
indepth
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in-depth
in depth
information
 on photosynthesis will help someone somewhere to appreciate how trees
helps
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 humans to get oxygen to
breath
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.
On the other hand
, free things loss it
value
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 and
make
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 people reluctant to pursue
such
 things. When
bebeficiaries
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beneficiaries
 fo something get
hteir
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their
 benefits without paying a penny for it, they devalue that thing.
For example
, when an
ielts
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 student is able to have free access to all the resources needed for him or her to pass the exam, the student normally
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 not attach importance to that material as compared to the ones they bought with their money. And
aso
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also
so
 they even feel lazy to read and make good use of those books or materials because they undermine it worth. In conclusion, some individuals consider detailed communication of
information
 pertaining t scientific methodology and the college world to be very relevant whiles others believe that these things should not be given for free. I think adequate sharing can
improves
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 people's knowledge but
this
 should not be given freely because people do not attach any degree of importance to things they acquire freely.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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