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Many think that all decisions within a company should be made by managers whereas others feel it is better to include employees in the process. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#decisions #company #managers #employees #process
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It has become a controversial issue, whether managers can take
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est decisions or workers. Some people hold the view that every
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 will be under the manager's control, whilst others claim that
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employees
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, I opine that neither all of the
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mployer only nor without the participation of their workers.
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ndeniable fact that employers have more authorities to take
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 for the organisation.
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, considering the whole company
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 of
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pecific department,
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mployer is at
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 better position to take relevant
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.
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 is because he will think about the overall growth of the company, and of course for the betterment of all employees.
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, a manager will not only deem the consequences of the particular
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 think about the profit or loss of the business, before reaching to a conclusion.
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, it is crystal clear that an employer can hold the
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decision making
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 process in
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etter way.
On the other hand
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, decentralization has its own benefits.
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, It is quite popular, these days, people are working under the higher authority can take part in
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, different opinions and strategies will end up in
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est possible actions. What is more, by having feedback about the previous actions, that can only be explained by the
wokers
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workers
, will be proven beneficial to take future steps or actions for more profitable results.
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, employees from
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ifferent department can play a crucial role. To recapitulate, I would contend that both, manager and worker, should work in
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collaboration
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est
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 which can help in more production and profit.
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 some
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 can only be taken by the superior because of authority power, feedback and unique
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opinion
 cannot be neglected while taking decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Centralized authority
  • Top-down approach
  • Autocratic leadership
  • Managerial hierarchy
  • Operational efficiency
  • Accountability
  • Competence
  • Employee empowerment
  • Participative decision-making
  • Workplace democracy
  • Morale
  • Consensus
  • Bottom-up approach
  • Cross-functional collaboration
  • Organizational culture
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