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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case ? What is the most important thing to succeed in life ?

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 in
life
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 Many people unsuccessful in
school
 but later on end up being successful in
life
.
This
 essay tells you about why a
person
 is successful in
life
 and happiness/satisfaction is most important
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to succeed in
life
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Person
fail
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 in
school
 have very less idea about
life
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I'm fail
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 in
school
life
then
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 have
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hance to learn from my mistakes.Each
person
 should fail at
somepoint
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some point
 so that they will learn their mistake and would not repeat it again in their
life
.I think people those who have failed while in
school
 will realise that they had
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uge mistake and to cover it they start working hard and end up being successful in
life
. Happiness is
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ey to
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uccessful
life
.The more
person
 is happy the more successful he will be.
For example
, If a p[erson is not happy with his work he will not give his 100 % dedication towards work; but if he is
intrested
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interested
 in any work
then
 he will give more than his full dedication.
Thats
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 how happiness is
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asic thing for being successful in
life
. To summarize, failure in early age can be helpful as it will help to realize mistakes done by
p
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erson whereas ,happiness
is plays
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 a crucial role in terms
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being succeed
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being succeeded
succeeding
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 in
life
.
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