Some people think that in order to produce a happy society, it is necessary to ensure that there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and the poorest. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The economical inequality is so evident in our world. There are some people
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that it is better to cap the salary of the rich, by doing
this
, the residents would be happier. I do not agree with
this
standpoint since
this
can have severe repercussions
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the nation.
To begin
with, to improve the standard of the economically deprived, the first and foremost step is to avail free access to education for all, irrespective of their background.
Consequently
, they would
able
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to secure a well-paid job.
For example
, another possible method is to fix the minimum wage for every employment.
Thus
, slowly and gradually, the destitute would witness the prosperity in their lives and they feel content.
However
, if the government introduces a plan to cap the salary of the affluent, could bring serious ramifications.
This
is because they may feel displeasure,
as a result
, the employee may migrate to developed nations, where they can earn handsome money without any restrictions.
For instance
, recently, many wealthy Indian businessmen have migrated to different foreign countries, where they could get tax exemptions
such
as Malta.
Due to
this
, some unintentional effects can bring to
society'
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s
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's
finance
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status
while
attempting to maintain the optimum standard of living for all. In conclusion, in order to minimise the
economical
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imbalance of any country, capping
of
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the
rich' s
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rich's
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income would be a feasible solution,
according to
some. In my opinion, I firmly reiterate
this
hardly
bring
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any positive outcome as
this
causes dissatisfaction among the wealthy. It is highly recommended that the authority
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