Scientist and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musician and artist. To what extent do you agree/ disagree

In
this
modern era wherein there every individual is self-determined and want to have a better career, we have few professions like scientist and Information
technology
geniuses who have are considered superior along with having more
respect
in the
society
, when compared to music performers and other Artists I would completely agree with
this
as
science
and
technology
experts play a very important role in advancing human
life
and
also
they are paid higher by the government and companies earning them more
respect
in the
society
.
Firstly
, Scientist and
technology
experts help in advancing the living standard of human.
Science
professionals always thrive to save human
life
, provide vaccines, conduct researches for the betterment of humanity, along with assistance from
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echnology professional who
innovate
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various gadgets, machines, tools which make our
life
simple on
this
planet.
For example
, NASA an organization, which consist of both knowledgeable expertise in
science
and
technology
wherein these geniuses work together to explore the universe and protect
human
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from any manmade or natural disasters. Due to which they are given
respect
by everyone in
the
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society
as their work is for the betterment of everyone.
Secondly
, Scientist and
technology
expert
are
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paid higher in every country compared to musicians and artist which
also
is a reason for more
respect
given to them. A better pay scale earned by them results in a higher standard of living when compared to artists and musicians who have to struggle for numerous years to be famous and earn well.
For example
, as per a recent survey in Delhi by Time magazine, the annual income of an IT professional was almost 60 higher than any Music jockey or rapper in the city.
This
proves that
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etter lifestyle is always proportionate to the
respect
earned in
society
. In conclusion, I would agree that Professionals from
science
and
Technology
field are given more
respect
and appreciation by the community as they help in advancing and saving human
life
and they have a better lifestyle due to high income. *Additional BP2*
Secondly
,
Science
and technical experts are considered to be smarter by
the
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society
when compared to any performing artist. As we know being a
technology
or
science
expert requires years of studying,
practicing
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and gaining knowledge which is always respected in every country whereas many people think that artist and music professional are taking a shortcut to be successful in
life
. to per a recent survey done by DNA newspaper in new Delhi school, 68% of
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parents wanted their kids to be doctors or engineers, which clearly depicts the profession they support and
respect
.
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