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In towns and cities, large shopping malls should replace the small local shop. Do you agree or disagree?

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Large shopping malls are spreading their wings all around the globe by replacing traditional small shops. It is becoming apparent in all urban areas. It is agreed that mall culture should be promoted but, not at the cost of small shops.
This
 will be analyzed by looking at how convenience and economic benefits have made them the most preferred choice for customers.
To begin
 with, the infrastructure of big malls facilitates consumers to shop conveniently.
For example
, malls are equipped with large parking spaces, lavatories, food courts, air conditioning, and entertainment areas which makes them much more desirable than small shops. One can spend an entire day with their family or friends as there is something for everyone. Looking at
this
 example it is clear why malls are preferred over shops.
Thus
, they are considered better from all aspects by the majority of shoppers.
Moreover
, malls are proven good for the economy as they can generate more income, create many employment opportunities.
For instance
, the sheer size and variety of products attract many people.
Consequently
, malls earn a lot of income as well as generate mass employment opportunities.
This
 proves why they are replacing small shops. From
this
 one can conclude that uptrend in mall culture is definitely better. conclude that the impact of large shopping malls replacing local shops is prominent,
although
 the way it kills the local economy should be well handled.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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