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High-school students should take a gap year before going to university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#high-school #students #gap #year #university
Time
 is the most important thing in our
life
 so that we should
use
time
 wisely.In early ages
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student
 can not make a good
desicion
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decision
decisions
 about their future
life
.In my view
gap
year
 is
g
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ood
time
 to
discorver
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discover
 yourself.but I can say
s
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tudent should
use
this
year
benefical
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beneficial
 for their university
life
.
Firstly
 when
h
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igh-school
student
 graduated they are only in 18
year
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 old and
this
 is very early ages for professional
life
.
Gap
year
adventages
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advantages
adventures
 are
student
attent
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attend
 public charity work and
this
 way their
resposibilty
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responsibility
 sense getting extent. Some of
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tudent go to Africa for unpaid work. and the others go to
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traveling
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 world with
l
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a
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imited budget.
This
 way they can learn
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earn money with their muscle work.Travel teaches a
lof
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lot
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 of things,
student
see
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different tradition and
culturel
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culture
, meet
foreing
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foreign
 people so
this
effect
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 their future perspective.
Secondly
,
personnally
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personally
 I could not
decided
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decide
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 my major easily
however
 I must attend college because in my country there is no
gap
year
 concept.But
this
 is effect my university
life
.University lecture
are
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 more difficult than high-school subjects.
Also
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separe
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separate
 schedule
give
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 me a more free
time
 but I cannot fit in very well.But my opinion If I take a
gap
year
 I learn
hoe
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how
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 to spend my
life
 more quality
anl
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and
 I will learn about my future major. To sum up
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take a
gap
year
 is good
consept
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concept
 for
s
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the
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tudent, They can educate yourself and gain a
lof
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lot
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 of experience.
However
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student
 must
be
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use
this
 free
time
 goodly.If they
use
 wisely
this
time
 they will have a perfect university
life
.
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