Some people from poor and rural background from it difficult to get a university education.Universities have to make it easier especially for such groups to get into them.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In the new era, things have changed. The bartered system is the talk of the town. The concept of education has changed completely. The only thing colleges care nowadays is about how much money they can make. They are ready to give superficial comforts, On another hand they terrible lack the most important component of the education cycle " Quality " of both students and teachers. In
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the students who deserve chance are left behind. I shall be discussing more on
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60-degree turn and the only thing today's lecturer understand is
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the students who are
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orrect candidate for the position, with magnanimous capabilities are deprived of the knowledge. Colleges with high-level exposer and the students they lack the opportunity as they can't afford to pay
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ituation, I strongly believe our government should interfere and take the charge. And give
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children to grow and nurture their strength which will in return come back to our country's growth.
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left behind. Our country
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capable young shoulder. whereas who doest even deserve
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get all the privileges just because of their living standers. To conclude, I recommend not only our government but ourselves as grown adult and citizen of the country to have an active involvement to help and give them what is rightfully theirs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social mobility
  • Underprivileged
  • Equal opportunities
  • Diversity
  • Financial constraints
  • Affirmative action
  • Scholarships
  • Grants
  • Admission standards
  • Non-profit organizations
  • Outreach programs
  • Meritocracy
  • Education gap
  • Rural areas
  • University admissions
  • Inclusivity
  • Socioeconomic barriers
  • Educational equity
  • Access to education
  • Disadvantaged
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