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The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed?.

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The line graph compares data about the percentage of people with different age groups going to the cinema in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010. Overall, cinema attendance is the highest among the people
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aged 14 to 24 and the lowest attendance rate belongs to people who are 50 or more from 1990 to the present.
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1990. In 2010, nearly every person who aged 14 to 24 will watch a movie in
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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