Selecting a profession is a huge task because it can have a life- long impact.
there are some advocates opine that a job is something personal and the younger generation should permit to select the one based on their preference, the opponents believe that they are immature to take
a crucial decision and I support the former's view
On the one side of the argument, if the youth are allowed to select their profession can have many benefits and I agree with
, they would tend to work hard in order to secure higher positions in their career. For which they would put an extra effort
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or coachings to grow within their employment.
, commitments can be visible when a person chooses his own career path,
, if anyone is forced to opt a work
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if which is not his area of interest, could bring repercussions.
, despite the above-mentioned argument, the opponents think that the youth are not mature to decide what is right for them.
is because they have not sufficient experience to find out which profession provides a well-paid salary and promotions to uplift life to the
level. Due to
, parents or relevant family members should take a decision on the behalf of them.
, presently,when there is plenty of jobs on the market,
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nemployment rate is so high since the generation is not equipped to place them on it, eventually, they end up in doing some low paid temporary works that lack any future.
In conclusion, people have a different opinion on whether the youngsters or the adult decide the best job for the youth. I firmly, support the former's view since it has a valid reason.