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Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #sports #games #society #leisure #activities
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The bar graph compares the change in the percentage of people growth in four different nations between 1950 and 2000 and
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-century period of time. Overall, what can be seen from
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 to remain stable. Looking at the details, In 1950, china was in the
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 position, followed by India, and the percentage were approximately 26 and 15 respectively. After 50 years, while India' s population continue to climb, china had the opposite trend. The predication for
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2050, India will overtake China and reach its peak at just above 20%, when
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igure for China is anticipated to be just below 20%. Regarding The USA and Japan, the former had 10% contribution to the world population in the year of 1950 while the latter was at 5%. Since
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 the USA experienced a decline to at8% and the value will be remained the same for even in 2050. Japan is the country which will hit a low of nearly 2% in 2050.
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