Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think school''s rewarding system should be result-oriented, while others think that a
student
's effort and achievement should be valued more. While the former point on view focuses more on absolute attainment among all students the latter focuses more on a relative degree of an endeavour of each
student
individually. Both points of view will be thoroughly analysed and discussed before drawing a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly
, schools that reward only students with the highest results could often indirectly produce an unbalanced environment by favouring only students that excel at something regardless of their effort.
For instance
, students that are naturally gifted and predisposed for a certain subject will excel there without much work.
This
could be beneficial for
student
's motivation in the beginning, but since they are prized solely on their achievement, which could be without much struggle, students might be used to rely only on their talent.
Consequently
, once those students run into more complex and challenging tasks they might underestimate hard work thinking that they will complete it without much preparation as before which could bring unsatisfactory results at the end.
Secondly
, those schools that reward positive trend in
student
's marks independently of their capabilities and the overall result will frequently motivate all students to always aim for higher.
For example
, at the beginning of learning unfamiliar matter, a
student
might find enormously hard to grasp some concepts and could lose motivation. But if awarded for the perseverance of solving those obstacles, students could gain immense encouragement to continue improving upon their skills.
Thus
,
this
approach will give them even more motivation to excel in subjects they thought they were not predestined for. To summarise, schools that highly value and award exclusively result-oriented students undervalue the group of students that would be eager to advance in small steps.
On the other hand
, schools that motivate all students to strive in hard work and focus more on a process rather than on the outcome, will at the end, counterintuitively, show better overall results. After thorough analysis, in the essence, schools should give the advantage of nurture over nature and should be process-oriented
instead
of result-oriented.
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