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Some people think that we should use traditional methods to solve our problems, others say that we should use modern methods. Give your opinion and also explain how important is to use new methods.

#people #methods
While someone
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 that we should
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 traditional methods to solve our problems, others say that we
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should
use
 modern methods. I personally prefer to
use
 new methods as they can be more effective and immediate than
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lder one.
Firstly
, it's noticeable that the older methods could appear more effective as they are based on experience and are more tested, but in some scenarios new technique could be more effective and faster than older ones.
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new
techinques
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techniques
 are developed
takinf
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taking
 into account the knowledge and arts that cames out from the older one. To cite an example, nowadays everyone can access an internet map on their mobile phones, while just 20 years ago that was
unbelivable
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unbelievable
. The same process can be done in just
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ew clicks and above 1 minute.
Secondly
, as I said before, modern techniques in most cases provide
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additional support in order to solve our problem.
Moreover
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they could be so effective that can save our life.
For instance
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we can observe the
self driving
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 cars, they need to solve problems and take decision while driving, in some scenarios it happened that the car took the best possible decision in order to avoid a collision or to avoid an accident. To sum up, we should learn to
use
 new technologies and be more confident using new methods to solve our problems.
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