Although many people value their public parks, this space could be used other purpose such as residential areas for over growing population or to develop business and boost economics. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Nowadays,the world has changed dramatically but our world has a limited area.There

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not enough space due to

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population.Some people believe that public area

such

as parks should be replaced by the building ex. the condo which can help to expand economics.Personally,I strongly disagree with

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statement. Begin with,the

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reason why the

park

should be prevented is it is the place for people to chill out.When people get anxious with their work,they usually go to the public

park

for relaxing.

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green areas for people to have a

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with their family.

Then

it can be noticed that it gains a lot of good emotions to them.

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there are various in the

park

for people to select.People always go to hang out with their friends in the

park

.

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is because it is

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ery cosy and peaceful place.

Furthermore

,another reason is it can reduce the number of pollution significantly comparing with the residential building.Most

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eople want to get

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fresh air so the

park

is the best alternative ways for people to opt.

In addition

,in

this

period of time people usually care about their healths.

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when we have

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public parking ,it can release O2 from

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Then

our body will become fit and healthy by having the

park

instead

of the building.

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,in Copenhagen is the

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zero countries.People try to save the

park

and separate the residential area too far away from the

park

.After that when it worked, the percentage of pollution declined rapidly.

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causes their citizens to  become healthy. In conclusion,

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ublic

park

is the most essential for people.It provides people to have a good feeling.

Moreover

,it can help people to get fit by dropping the proportion of pollution.