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Nowadays there is a wide range of TV programs.But instead of watching educational programs news or documentary films, more and more people prefer to watch TV shows soap authorised or serials and this negative effects knowledge and acquisition skills what are the primary causes of this tendency?

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In the past few years
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 have been made available for the audience in case of TV programs. But today people are more likely to rather watch entertaining programs that informative ones and it can bring negative impacts on
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ducation of children.
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 addiction.one of the main reasons may be probably the interesting script which makes the viewers eager to know what would happen
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ifferent genre and all those twist and turns and mainly, the extravagant acting skills of characters makes people delighted. They want to get entertained by staying indoors.Music and dramas are more popular than use and documentaries that many outdoor activities are getting less popular.Meanwhile, informative programs have low space and tedious plots that children's and elders both feels dull and they lost their interest to watch them.
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opularity of educational programmes like news and debates can be increased by bringing more visual effects and other innovative ideas like adding new background scores.
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 would help the viewers to concentrate and enjoy themselves learning about the current world.Children can learn useful facts about history science and general knowledge as well as they can improve their language skills by watching these kinds of standardized programs, helping them lead a better life and making them aware on the various life situations.
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, inviting famous idols and representatives to join the educational game shows draws more attention especially, of youngsters. In conclusion, entertaining programs may have negative impacts on the life of people especially, students.
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 encouraged to watch educational programs like documentaries in order to build their social skills.
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